The thoughts ran thick and fast. The nostalgia. The laughter that the house had witnessed in better times. The pitter-patter of Poppet, the poodle’s dancing toes.
The profligacy that had destroyed it all. The sheer disdain for rules that led to encroachment of the public road for unnecessary expansion of the porch. Finally, the unscrupulousness of the builder in cheap construction material that had brought the beams crashing down when the bulldozers had arrived to clear the encroachment.
Sandy was simply glad he was able to re-purchase the abandoned property and establish his car-repair shop. Life had come a full circle.
Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Fridayfictioneers .
That was a great little story – almost left me breathless, you crammed so much in. Well done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thanks Susan.
A chance to start over – nice take.
Thanks Iain
I like the way you have constructed this. The first two paragraphs contain so much detail, conjuring up image after image. Your last paragraph slows everything down to a single emotion; Sandy is pleased that he can establish his car repair shop. Simplicity and contentment are restored!
Thanks Penny for the kind comments
Great story and so well written.
Thanks moon
I REALLY like the originality of the sentences and this depth of history you managed to give us.
and did you know that you used the word “the” 15 times – at first I was wondering if it was toomuch – well only in the first part when I felt like – it was a lot of ‘the’ – but the many “the” words is part of the beauty of the writing here.
it adds to a flow of the words –
setting each aspect a part – adding to the energy you gave us –
The thoughts The nostalgia. The laughter The pitter
and so I love the happy ending of full circle too – but most of all this was Lavanya originality and oh so fresh
Wow, thanks for the brilliant attention to details and the creative feedback. Such ability to delve into the mind of the author is not just rare but phenomenal.
woo hoo
the pleasure was all mine –
have a nice day
I hope his car repair shop was built to a higher standard! I like the full circle.
Hopefully 😁. Thanks for stopping by
A chance to begin again. How satisfying!
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Thanks Keith
Full circle indeed. Would be nice to see the photo prompt that goes with the story…
Hi Dale. You can view the pic on the blog but strangely doesn’t appear if you click the link!
Weird… The link brings us to your blog… So weird!
I think it’s fine now, Dale. Thanks once again for stopping by and the heads up.
Sounds as though he’s learned a lot from hard experience.
That he did, for sure. Thanks Sandra for writing in.
Love the fresh start…
Thanks Bjorn!
Dear Lavanya,
I like the way you brought it full circle. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle